8 March 2013

Published March 6, 2013 by rochellewisoff

TIME FOR THE FANTASTIC FRIDAY FICTIONEERS!

Calling all muses. Fire into action! Ready! Set! Write!

 

THE CHALLENGE:

Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)

THE KEY:

Make every word count.

THE RULES:

  • Copy your URL to the Linkz collection. You’ll find the tab following the photo prompt. It’s the little white box to the left with the blue froggy guy. Click on it and follow directions. This is the best way to get the most reads and comments.
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Genre: Literary Fiction

Word Count: 100

THE THOUSANDTH MILE

            “A journey begins with a single step,” said Jared as he sprinted down the trail.

            “Surprise me. Say something original”

            “Last one to the oak tree’s a rotten egg.”

            I chased him but never caught up. Who could? Jared set track records in high school and college.

            When I reached the tree he took my face in his hands. “I leave for Afghanistan day after tomorrow.”

            Originality I didn’t want to hear.        

            Two years later Jared still spouts clichés and platitudes. I don’t mind.

            On prosthetics he wins his first 10K and grins. “A journey begins with a single step.” 

129 comments on “8 March 2013

  • Dear Rochelle,

    Your story is a winner that captures the indomitable spirit of our wounded warriors to a tee. The video was an excellent choice, too. Thank you for sharing both. I love how you step way outside of the box after you gaze at the prompt. Mark of a great imagination and a handy tool for anyone, but especially an author.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  • Hmmm, I will definitely be pondering this one. Love the pic, reminds me of one I took years ago at the Shaker Village in Kentucky. Liked your little story, too. It alone could lead to an entire novel — Opp I think I might have already written that one… 🙂

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  • Rochelle,
    What a great story about someone who never gives up. It goes well with the picture and the arduous journey that’s implied in it. To be able to keep going under those conditions shows true spirit. Wonderful story!

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    • Thank you for your kind words, David. I’m glad you saw the implications that cannot really be put into 100 words. I’m thinking a longer work for this one. I feel an expansion coming on.
      Glad you liked it.
      Shalom,
      Rochelle

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  • Dear Rochelle
    What a lovely story. Indomitable spirit and determination winning through against adversity, and a love story to boot! What more could we ask for.
    Perfect
    Dee

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  • Thank God for those men and women who serve, even to the point of giving their lives and thank God for blessing some with the vision and ability to make the technology to give back a small part of what’s been lost. Thanks to writers with the ability to tell the stories and touch our hearts.

    janet

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  • Holy Cats, Jennifer! That picture is making me dizzy… but I have an idea.

    I’m not reading Rochelle’s story, or any of the other ‘Wednesday Fictioneers’… 14 with stories submitted already and I’ve just woke up. I guess that’s what I get for not being a night owl and living on the West Coast… or living even further West and gazing at the stars all night. But then, I guess he would call us all Easterners…

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  • Thanks for making this writing exercise available Rochelle. I hope you don’t mind that I posted mine today. I love yours, btw. Inspiring. Our son-in-law just returned from deployment in Afghanistan.

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  • I have been reading your posts for a few weeks now and having read your excellent story tonight I felt inspired to have a go myself. I would appreciate your thoughts if you have the time to visit. James

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  • This is a very exciting challenge!! I loved your story…you most definitely made every word count in a such deep and meaningful way!

    I just submitted my like for my first attempt. Thank you for this opportunity 🙂

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  • I hope I put the link in correctly. If not here it is:
    http://julesinflashyfiction.wordpress.com/2013/03/07/friday-fictioneers-the-stair-an-emotional-feast/

    Thanks for this challenge. I may not be a regular but I will be back. Because I was inspired by Alastair’s story I also added his link at my story site.

    I admire all service personnel, having had family in both the Navy and Army. Currently we have both a niece and nephew in service. Our family is also in a different type of service, being volunteer firefighters.

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    • Dear Jules,
      Having been a Navy wife, I have a great appreciation for the military. I also admire firefighters. A necessary job that takes courage and dedication.
      Thanks for you comments,
      shalom,
      Rochelle

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  • Oooh! It’s me! Thanks for using the pic, Rochelle. I can’t wait to see what everyone’s done with it. Your story was beautifully written – you really managed to capture a whole tale in 100 words – and I liked how the love between them if very clear, but playful rather than soppy.
    Interestingly, I had originally thought I’d do something metaphorical with this pic, but … well, I’ve gone rather literal in the end.

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  • A man with spirit – and he secret message of the story is the golden hearted friend he has….and maybe that is what is needed more than anything – then again,he would not have that kind of friend if his nature wasn’t what it was in the first place…friend or girlfriend/wife. Thanks – well-penned..of course!

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    • Dear Managua,
      Thank you for your insightful comments. I think there’s a whole lot of story left to be told between the beginning and end. I do see her as his wife, in which case, she’s his friend and girlfriend. 😉
      Shalom,
      Rochelle

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  • Regardless of politics, it’s very difficult not to respond emotionally to the people who make these types of sacrifices. I loved the positive ending to this story.

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  • Not all of us will witness what this young man and his love will endure. It happens way too often to our fighting men and we should not forget their experiences. His spirit is strong and not willing to submit to the limitations imposed on him. What a great composition Rochelle.

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  • I have really come to enjoy your style of writing these 100 word fiction pieces Rochelle. You always have a zing at the end of the story, and it usually tugs on the strings to my heart. Wonderful!

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  • Hi Rochelle
    A lovely uplifting story this week – I like how you’ve used the prompt for inspiration without interpreting it literally. Yours is only the second story I’ve read, but I have a feeling this is going to be an interesting week!

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    • Dear Petruj,
      You’ve moved me from stunned to speechless. Your poem is beautiful and to even be considered anywhere close to the same league as Mrs. Suzman is a great honor. Not sure I deserve it but thank you.
      Shalom, Rochelle

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      • I think I found you on Facebook. So is it Petruj or Petrus? Or maybe it’s someone else.in South Africa. Just asking. 😉 I love finding out where our writers are from. Fascinating to me that we’ve become such a global community.

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      • You’re an activist of a different sort and I just wanted to give something in return for what you are doing with Friday Fictioneers. I’m certainly very inspired and am doing things I never thought I could. This is a valuable platform for feedback and critique and it must be hard work for you. Shalom. Petru

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  • Wow, for 100 words this is both gripping and descriptive. I almost wish it went on a little longer to find out more of the story! haha Fantastic. I’m so glad I found this weekly writing prompt. I’ll be submitting my own soon, as well, and am excited to welcome constructive feedback from my fellow bloggers and talented writers 🙂

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    • Again welcome, Marisa. Happy to have you among us.
      I’m thinking of writing this one into a longer piece because I think there’s much more story to tell. Thank you for your comments.
      shalom,
      Rochelle

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