8 March 2019

Published March 6, 2019 by rochellewisoff

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This week, I’m sharing an excerpt from my WIP with working title WHAT THE HEART WANTS. Most of my snippets have spotlighted Bear Starfire, the unfortunate girl who was taken from her tribe to an Indian boarding school. My other main character is Asher Gorovich, a Jewish boy whose journey begins in Eastern Europe. These two are destined to meet but I’m not going to tell you how. πŸ˜‰ After all, I only want to whet the reader’s appetite.Β 

Genre: Historical Fiction

Word Count: 100

LUST AT FIRST SIGHT

The horses’ hooves clopped along the cobblestones. Ilya clucked his tongue as he steered the carriage. Asher’s heavy eyelids lowered and he slumped in the seat. He had almost drifted off when Ilya said, β€œShe is beautiful. She likes you, too.”

Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β  β€œYou really think so?” The idea of Kreindel returning his feelings filled Asher with yearning. The mere touch of her hand sent curious flames raging through him, making it difficult to sit. β€œHave you everβ€”? I mean it hurts.”

Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β Β  β€œDa.” Ilya pushed his limp hair off his acne-scarred forehead. β€œBut no girl’s ever given me a second look.”

124 comments on “8 March 2019

    • Dear C.E.

      Life is tougher some days than others and change is a challenge. Sorry for your pain. I don’t understand why you couldn’t download the prompt photo. At least it’s one of yours. Looking for the positive vibes.

      Good morning,

      Rochelle

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      • Thank you for your empathy, m’lady.
        When I download the file, with its .jpg extension, I am told it is a .webp file.
        And the wee froggy dude made me log in via FB and upload my photo again.
        Maybe it was just me, hmm?

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        • Not just you. It gave me some trouble again today and didn’t recognize my blog or my thumbnail. Again. Hopefully those are growing pains this ‘update’ will iron out, because in my view the older version is a lot more user friendly. Not sure why they ‘updated’ but so it is. Na’ama

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  • The pain of that unrequited first love! Given that Asher is destined to meet Bear in the future, I wonder what this means for Kreindal – an ill-fated romance perhaps?! Good tease to get us guessing Rochelle πŸ™‚

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  • A great teaser snippet from your WIP purple smurf. You have to wonder where each of them go with their love perceptions. I assume the majority of us have gone through both feelings. I look forward to seeing and reading the complete book. As with all your previous works, I know it will be great.

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    • Dear Jan,

      I’m at the “where do I go from here stage.” Purple smurf, eh? We’re talking about two adolescent boys here. Such a tough time of life, isn’t it? Thanks for the support, m’luv.

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    • Oh, and since the InLInkz is still an option: what annoys me most is that it doesn’t take the gravatar link for the user icon any longer. So it’s upload, where did I put it… should post it on the blog… doesn’t show in the inlinz… where did I put it… — annoying.
      And, since you’re in contact with them, do you know if it is ok to use that new stylish froggy instead of the link bar? Or if they have any images users can post freely? That’s the only thing with the new version I actually like. πŸ˜‰

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    • Dear Gabi,

      I’m in the final stages of the novel and preparing to send it to my beta readers. Where it will go from there I don’t know. It’s encouraging to know that my characters are real enough to fall in love with. Of course they’re very real to me. Thank you so much.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

      PS Glad we’re getting things squared away with inLinkz. πŸ˜‰

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  • You’re very skilful in how you set the scene for Asher and Ilya’s exchange of confidences. Putting them together in the carriage encloses them in a little bubble and makes the confiding of love very believable and natural. Clever writing, Rochelle!
    Shalom
    Penny

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    • Dear Penny,

      How very kind and encouraging you are. I’ve come to love these two young men over the course of the book. Someday off the grid, I’ll have to tell you my friend who is the basis for Ilya’s character. Thank you so much.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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  • Oh, how well I remember the pain of acne gone out of control! Back then, there wasn’t a thing you could do but agonize over how bad it looked on any given day. I was just told to avoid chocolate and spicy foods. Maybe that’s why I love chocolate and pizza so much today πŸ™‚

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  • Oh… this certainly makes me want to read more about them! Lovely!
    πŸ™‚
    Here’s my contribution — I left it on the “new and not improved IMO” linky thingy — took some fiddling (again) and a manual upload of yet another photo to crop for my thumbnail — it seems unable to do that automatically and seems to have amnesia to the same process from last week … (Am less cranky than last week but am still not a fan of this ‘update’ …)
    But … more to the point, here’s my little flash-fiction bit …
    https://naamayehuda.com/2019/03/06/black-friday/
    Na’ama

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  • I am so glad you used the cobbles, Plenty of cobblestones in Lancashire, your story led me into recalling the sound of wooden clogs clattering on wet cobbles as the mill worker started work. Lovely. Unlike the WordPress update which is giving me trouble.

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  • Kudos for a very intriguing peek into your work in progress. Kudos also for making a story stretch across so many continents and oceans, and also, for putting up with two adolescent boys for such a long time. Having two of my own I quite understand both the charms and curses of such prolonged exposure. 😊

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  • Ah! Young love is different while lust remains the same. Unrequited love (story of my teenage life) always lead me to these lines by John Donne (https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/44120/loves-deity)

    But every modern god will now extend
    His vast prerogative as far as Jove.
    To rage, to lust, to write to, to commend,
    All is the purlieu of the god of love.
    O! were we waken’d by this tyranny
    To ungod this child again, it could not be
    I should love her, who loves not me.

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  • Ah, bless Ilya! How I remember that feeling of being invisible to the opposite sex, being seen as the add on friend! His time will come. I’m so intrigued by your teaser, Rochelle – how will Asher and Bear Starfire meet? I can’t even imagine, but look forward to finding out. Have become more and more fascinated by this story as you feed us snippets. Good luck with the rest of the write πŸ™‚

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