Published July 6, 2012 by rochellewisoff

This week’s photo prompt from Amanda Gray was a challenge for me so I’m a little later posting than usual. Hope everyone had a safe and happy 4th.

“I detest camping,” said Ella.

But how could she resist Chuck’s brown-eyed, boyish pout? That same look coaxed her into matrimony to the impoverished med student a year ago.

Two miles past the nearest service station, his classic Mustang stalled. Neither of their cell phones found a signal and the sun was setting. Resentment swelled her. Pain riddled her back and thighs as they hauled their gear to a nearby abandoned building.

“At least we don’t have to pitch the tent. See, El, our luck’s about to change.”

“More than you can imagine.”


“My water just broke.”

39 comments on “ENCAMPMENT

  • Aha, Doug. You noticed that he was a med student. I didn't want to leave Ella with a completely clueless husband. Although, coaxing his very pregnant wife to go camping in the middle of nowhere might not be the smartest thing, either.


  • There's no WAY you'd get me camping at 5 months pregnant, let alone 9, so she has some of my sympathy but not much. I hope eveything turns out OK, though. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on mine!


  • Another great story, Rochelle. And you go on to leave us in suspense. I like the witty response she gave when he said their luck was about to change. It made me chuckle a bit, even though the situation was serious.I think the second line should read:But how could she resist Chuck’s brown-eyed, boyish pout?Thanks for coming over to logo-ligi: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/07/06/healing/


  • He's not even in residency yet. Crash course in laborious and delivery! There's a lot of other underlying emotions going on here. I'd love to read how their life progresses. Her resentment is telling.


  • My husband is a Master Mariner and he has to go through basic midwifery training for his medical officer certificate. He was the uterus once in a class, haha, and then he delivered our daughter (in a hospital, under the close watch of a real midwife). The med student should be ok, but shame on him for being so careless with a heavily pregnant wife!Great little story, Rochelle. As you can see, it produced memories and lots of feelings. Love that!I'm here: http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/07/06/the-house-that-jack-built-ff-6712/


  • I want to kill that insensitive husband. How selfish of him. Plus I can't believe she agreed to go camping with him at that stage of her pregnancy. You got me going, Rochelle. lol. Nice work.


  • I know my wife would never let me take her camping, regardless of what stage of pregnancy she was in – poor Ella, at least she'll get a good story to tell at the little one's 21st birthday! And @newpillowbook, Chuck will need to go hiking soon, I'd wager!


  • Nice twist at the end (great last line). Ella definitely should have mentioned her preference for not camping earlier (especially being that pregnant!) — I'm sure her generally thoughtless husband would have followed her lead on that one. ;)General tip: product brands are capitalized in the way the company established them.[I'm a horse person, so I had infinite glee when I saw that "his classic mustang stalled." (Images of handsome horses refusing to move forward and the places where humans normally keep them danced in my head).]


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