Published August 31, 2012 by rochellewisoff

This Week’s Friday Fictioneers photo is from Stacy Plowright.  Thanks to Madison Woods for opening this forum to form a global community. Who knew?

 Thanks for dropping by, Rochelle.


“To delight the angels she dances on clouds. Heaven is illuminated by her presence.”  

“Clichés.” Luke spat in the sand. “Who really dances on clouds anyway?”

His poetic words touting faith and hope did little to convince himself. He flung his notebook to the ground. Thirteen years was not enough time to love.

Even though none had fallen, he tasted rain. Vaporous whorls and ridges imprinted the blackening sky.

He waded into the churning sea. There he waited for lightning to sear him until her voice whispered on the wind.

“Stay here, my love. Our boys still need you.”

38 comments on “WRITER’S CATHARSIS

  • Rochelle,

    I read this twice. Loved it both times…felt very literature like to read (hope I made sense with my improper grammar). Your choice of words were perfect for the story’s imagery.
    “vaporous whorls and ridges imprinted…”

    Very well done!!!


  • Rockstar: 100 words with depth and many levels. He’s wise enough to recognize the cliches which disgust him. Feeling self doubt and self pity without his spouse. Love the message about the boys needing him. Maybe this will wake him up and he’ll get on with his life. I’m #29 this week.


  • You usually write very good shorts, Rochelle, however, this one was better than very good, better by far. Not only was your underlying subject matter gripping and well crafted but your selection of words was just beautiful. I really enjoyed this delivery. Thanks.


  • I really enjoyed this – the about-turn after the first line really got my attention. I love the symmetry created between his cynicism, and the lyrical style of the narrative voice. Really well structured, nicely written.


  • I can tell this story came from someplace very deep. I’ve read this one four times already and I still can’t get enough of it. I think the word ‘beautiful’ has been used in the comments section more than a few times, but your story truly is that! Left me wanting to know a lot more about your writer’s story – his personal story that is. Well, well done!


  • “Thirteen years was not enough time to love.” – such grief at the heart of the story!

    The last scene of this piece makes me think of ancient Greece and Rome. I’m trying to remember – is there an ancient writer named Luke (Lukas, Lucius, whatever) who was said to have had an affair with a goddess?

    Or of course, it could just be that his wife died – sad, sad story, anyhow. Well written.


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