IMBALANCE

Published September 21, 2012 by rochellewisoff

It’s that time again! Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Madison Woods for the opportunity, challenge and fun. It never ceases to amaze me how one picture can stir so many imaginations. Thanks to Lora Mitchell for the intriguing prompt. Here’s my submission for this week. I’m looking forward to reading other stories from new friends around the world. 97 words. 

          “Whaddya think?” Jeff parked Myra’s wheelchair next to the statue.

          Its three, single-file posterior wings and impossible position made her twisted back ache.

***

            One year ago today they’d strolled along the Poughkeepsie Bridge.

            Jeff whipped out his iPhone. “A portrait of next year’s Olympic gold medalist.  

            She mounted the side rail like she would a balance beam. There she struck a pose. But she slipped and plummeted 212 feet to the river.

***

            Myra stroked her lifeless legs and then the statue’s contorted neck. “I think if I had a fairy godmother, she’d look like that.”  

35 comments on “IMBALANCE

  • Ouch. I hope her fairy godmother is sorry for not looking after her better. Then again, after watching the Paralympics, perhaps she could still be aspiring to more if she wasn’t busy feeling sorry for herself! Great story.

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  • Ah, Rochelle, I guess the olympics is still fresh in both our minds. I’ve often wondered what my fairy God-mother must look like. Probably in a pink tutu, bearded, and weighing 285. The only way she could save me would be diving under me to break my fall.

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    • In an early draft of the story I had “The doctors called her a miracle.” . To fall from that distance, she’s extremely lucky to be alive. However, it was one of those sentences cut in the conservation of verbiage. At any rate we’ve all heard stories of people who’ve survived insurmountable odds.

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    • Interesting comment. Again, it’s hard to put everything into a 100 words. I hadn’t really considered Jeff, but in my head he really cared enough about her to stick by her. At any rate it was Myra’s idea to mount the railing, not his. But there again, it’s a challenge to convey everything in 100 words or less. Thanks for stopping by.

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  • Wow, if that one doesn’t put at least a small lump in your throat then it’s time to check for a beating heart. You have a gift of conjuring up powerful emotions with minimal words. I’m not sure how you do it, but I’m going to keep coming back here so I can learn!

    Very impressive Rochelle!

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