EIRONEIA

Published October 11, 2012 by rochellewisoff

As I post my latest Friday Fictioneer’s story it’s Friday Eve. That’s Thursday in some parts of the world.  For other stories from our growing global community click here.  You’ll find a wealth of  one hundred word stories inspired by this single photograph from Jan Morrill.

Summer 1969, an American sailor stationed in Greece, I went on leave to Santorini.

In Pyrgos, I met sable-eyed Melina.

We drank each other. Her fragrant breasts welcomed me home.

“Marry me,” I whispered.

“I can’t.”

After that I never saw her again.

Summer 2010, I returned to Pyrgos.

On the street I stopped a silver-haired woman. “Melina Dimitri? Do you know her?”

“Why?”

“I love her.”

“Impossible! She was my great-grandmother. Died in childbirth in 1846. Here she is with my great-grandfather.”

When the woman flipped out a daguerreotype I gasped at the youthful images of Melina and…me

57 comments on “EIRONEIA

  • I had to read the other comments to get the jest of the real story. Sorry. I first thought there was a possibility that the woman he talked to later was also named Melina, then thought there was a mistake made in the date year, but got it now. A time tunnel. OK. Good story with a different twist.

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  • I loved this. Very intriguing! I hope you keep it as is. I disagree with the idea of changing the word, “daguerreotype.” It was obviously taken prior to 1846, so it’s not strictly a “photo” and should be called what it is.

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    • Dear Jan,
      Hmmm. Well I did change old photograph to daguerreotype. I don’t know if I’ll change it or not. Would hate to have the only story with a revolving word. 😉 But I’ll listen to other comments and consider.
      I’m happy that you liked the story. Some of my favorite books and movies are about time travel. Fire for the imagination.

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    • I joined FF in April and have so much fodder for something larger I’ll be writing the rest of my life. I found myself longing for more words to play with this time but I’m anal about staying within the one hundred word boundaries. Glad you liked it.

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  • Dear Rochelle,

    If you think about it, my story could have been an episode of your story. 1969…Joni singing…the line about her predicting their future…the setting and the passion…

    Very interesting.

    I enjoyed your story very much on a number of different levels. Many more mysteries there than 100 words can do justice. Time travel is a great subject for writers. Lots of freedom and lots of paradoxes to examine.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • Dear Doug,
      I did notice some startling similarities in our stories. I didn’t read yours until after mine was written. Cross my heart.
      It might be fun at some point to explore this story in more than 100 words.
      In any case, I’m glad you enjoyed it.
      Shalom-Aloha,
      Rochelle

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  • The concept’s pretty cool—but I think it needs a lot more than 100 words to develop it properly. I found it very hard to believe that he went back to find her (although I know it does happen). Omitting “After that I never saw her again.” would help me (as a reader) with that. (The story ends here, anything afterwards feels unbelievable. If this sentence was removed, the reader is still open to all possibilities, including time travel.)

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