Once more our diverse band of intrepid FRIDAY FICTIONEERS sets out to write. We come together from such places as Kenya, Ghana, Stockholm, South Africa, Australia, the UK, Canada and the good ole US of A. Fascinating group. Join us!
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
THE RULES:
- Copy your URL to the Linkz collection. You’ll find the tab following the photo prompt. It’s the little white box to the left with the blue froggy guy. Click on it and follow directions. This is the best way to get the most reads and comments.
- MAKE SURE YOUR LINK IS SPECIFIC TO YOUR FLASH FICTION. (Should you find that you’ve made an error you can delete by clicking the little red ‘x’ that should appear under your icon. Then re-enter your URL. (If there’s no red x email me at Runtshell@aol.com. I can delete the wrong link for you).
- Thanks to Blogspot bloggers for (please) disabling their CAPTCHAs. (Example below)
- Make note in your blog if you’d prefer not to have constructive criticism.
- REMINDER: This page is “FRIDAY FICTIONEERS CENTRAL” and is NOT the place to promote political or religious views. Also, you are responsible for the content of your story and policing comments on your blog. You have the right to delete any you consider offensive.
**Please exercise DISCRETION when commenting on a story! Be RESPECTFUL.**
Should someone have severe or hostile differences of opinion with another person it’s my hope that the involved parties would settle their disputes in private.
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My story will follow the prompt for those who might be distracted by reading a story before writing their own . I enjoy your comments.

Copyright –Douglas M. MacIlroy
My story this week is dedicated to a friend knows too well the pain of separation and change.
Genre: Literary Fiction
Word count: 99
FRIENDS
Often during Chase and Amelia’s thousands-of-miles-apart, online chats, he would interrupt and say, “Brb. Mystic needs his ears scratched.” or “Mystic wants an apple.”
One night, after a simple “hello” and an extended pause, he declared, “Jayne sold Mystic.”
Amelia’s screen blurred. “That sucks.”
“Her property. No big deal.”
Despite Chase’s protests, Amelia detected anguish in his typo-riddled, printed voice. Although none appeared in the portrait icon beside his screen name, she intuited tears.
She typed and backspaced over at least a hundred shallow words of comfort before proffering only two.
“I’m here.”
“I love that horse.”
“I know.”
Great story. With animals like that the line between property and friend gets seriously blurred. It’s heartbreaking when they leave us so soon.
By the way, when I was scrolling down, I thought the picture with the captcha was the prompt. I had a whole story made up in my head before I saw the picture of the horse. 🙂
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Dear David,
I’m glad you liked my story. i, for one, get very attached to animals. They’re trusting and love unconditionally.
As for the Captcha picture…ha! I could write a story about it myself. Maybe it would get the point across. ;).
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Yes. I could see how 100 stories about how annoying captchas are might get the message across. 🙂
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I thought that too…Then…the slow scroll down. Could be it’s own prompt – one day.
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I thought it was the prompt, too, at first. It might make for some very inquisitive entrys, indeed.
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The captcha is indicative of most of my story lines now, only theirs makes more sense.
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LOLLL!!
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Great story! I loved the picture too.
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Thank you for coming by and commenting, Rosie. Warm words on a cold morning. I love the picture, too.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Very beautiful, powerful and moving testimony. Rather similar to an experience of mine! The way it is crafted is really evocative.
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Dear Managua,
Thank you for your lovely compliment. Glad you liked my story. This one is very dear to my heart.
shalom,
Rochelle
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This one is my favourite of yours so far! I loved it.
Denmother
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It’s always nice to hear my story was someone’s favorite. Thank you, Denmother.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle,
Well, you know where I stand on this story, me being so close to Mystic and all. As you so aptly said, my screen’s getting blurry.
I love that horse…and you too.
Aloha,
Doug
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Prayers are with you, Doug. It’s hard to loose such a friend. (hugs)
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Dear Doug,
You’ve once more rendered my screen blurry, too. Friendship’s love
is a precious gift, no matter where you find it. I happily cherish that gift.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Makes the point that animals are often our best friends
A good on-line friend to pick up what isn’t said
thanks for your hard work each week Rochelle with Friday Fictioneers
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Dear MoonDust,
No one asks less from a relationship than an animal. Thanks for your comments and your support.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Rochelle, twice now I’ve immediately started thinking of a story to match the captcha image that comes up in the reader before realizing I needed to scroll to see the photo prompt. Too funny, this morning I actually thought of a story of how someone had no way to prove they we’re not a robot. Too early, need coffee. Enjoyed your story.
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Did you notice that the prompt asked for “two words” but only one was given… That could lead to a lot of confusion in and of itself. What if, instead of having to prove we aren’t robots, we had to prove we were when we really weren’t… hmmm, think about it…
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Oh, that would make a great story. Told in 100 words, though…hmmm. Something to ponder (or process).
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Heaving heavy sigh here. I probably should have made the Captcha picture smaller. I just keep hoping the message will be heeded. I hate having to leave my first born’s birth certificate and a DNA sample to leave a comment.
I’m sure I could write a 200 word story on the subject.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I was thinking of TSA style pat-downs on my site 🙂 It might just double the number of visitors.
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Thanks for the photo Doug. Rochelle, I’ve never owned a horse. Though I have had critters I’ve been very attached to. Some folks go out and get replacements right away. Our last loss has left us pet-less. But I get my fix from visiting family and friends. And the wild birds in my yard. 🙂
I’ll probably post a second piece once Alastair’s posted his. But I’ve a busy day and well you just can’t hold a good muse down…
Thanks again for hosting.
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After my assistance doggie was stolen from my yard, many offered to replace it right away. I couldn’t do it. I’d invested sooo much time and energy into training Maigon for what I needed him to do for me. That was almost 3 yrs ago this June and still, I haven’t replaced him.
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Dear Jules,
Hosting Friday Fictioneers is one of my greatest pleasures.
I know what you mean about pets. A couple of years ago we lost a cat that we’d had for 18 years. Still miss her but have not desire to get a replacement.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Rochelle, very sweet story. I love Amelia’s typing and backspacing over a hundred replies. My only suggestion is to put -dare I say this- a couple typos in Chase’s line. Since Amelia notices his typos, I want to notice them, too, even though typos usually make me cringe! 🙂
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I actually thought of doing just that, Lisa, but somehow it didn’t seem to fit. In my opinion it would be a hindrance and a distraction or even added a humorous note which wouldn’t fit.
In any case I’m happy you liked my story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Being a horse person myself, with a horse that’s 30 and apt to not make it too much longer, I fully empathize. 😦 But at least when Sunday goes, it’s not because someone else got rid of her. You spun the story beautifully and the title is apt for both sets of friends. These lines are particularly good:
” Despite Chase’s protests, Amelia detected anguish in his typo-riddled, printed voice. Although none appeared in the portrait icon beside his screen name, she intuited tears.
She typed and backspaced over at least a hundred shallow words of comfort before proffering only two.”
I like the entire idea of “seeing” someone even online (which I believe you can), love “intuited tears” in the same context, and believe that often “I’m here” is all that can initially and realistically be offered. On the other hand, that’s often all that’s needed.
Unfortunately, the most useful thing for Chase is also the most difficult–to forgive Jayne–not for her, sake but for his. As you and I have talked about before in different contexts, the only person you have any chance of controlling and making choices for is yourself. To quote a song, “This is where the healing begins.” I hope he’s able to make that choice and, with friendships, grow and move on.
janet
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“I’m here.” Sometimes means more than all the words in Mirriam Websters grand dictionary.
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Dear Janet,
Thanks for your intuiting my intent. 😉 As we both know some online friendships are more up close and personal than physical ones. Even as I’m replying to your lovely comments I find myself backspacing several times in an attempt to convey the right message. Thanks for your friendship, Mrs. Tea. Shows how online can grow into something more immediate.
Blessings and Shalom,
Rochelle
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My heart is sooo heavy this week with the news of my Fatherinlaws Cancer diagnosis that I’m not sure how I’m going to respond to this picture. Your story says sooo much. It’s sooo powerful. I’ll go give it a go…
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Dear BuffaloStar,
Thank you for your kind words. I’m sorry to hear for about your father-in-law. Prayers and hugs coming your way.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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The horse has won his heart, but now it is taken away prematurely, at least in his estimation. I can feel his sadness through your description.
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Dear Joe,
There’s no greater compliment to a writer than to know that she’s made you feel something. 😉
shalom,
Rochelle
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This is wonderful Rochelle. Much feeling is clearly expressed, but what I really liked was the clever way that you made the reader aware of the power of online chatting with friends across the miles from one another. a testament to our ability to emotionally connect with one another online! Great piece. Penny 🙂
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Dear Penny,
Thank you for your perceptive comments. Some of the deepest relationships have been forged in chat boxes. There’s no face to “get in the way” of the view of a person’s soul.
Glad you liked it.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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So sweet… and my screen blurrs. So good story in such few words.
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Happy (?) to have made your screen blur, Björn.
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Aww, that was sad. Good but sad.
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Thanks, Lyn.
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such a great idea for a blog. can anyone join in?
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The short answer is–yes. Jump right in and if you have questions that aren’t answered or clear in what Rochelle wrote in her preface, ask. We’re a pretty decent group, although we tend to bump people off at a rapid rate.
janet
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haha sounds scary! maybe one day….. when I have an interesting 100 words….
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It’s not at all scary and very addictive. But enjoy reading everyone’s stories and do join soon.
janet
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“I’m here.” –perfect. enjoyed your story.
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Sometimes that’s all that’s necessary.
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shore can love those dag-blanged horses. Made me all misty eyed myself. 🙂
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Dear Bill,
Shore is nice to hear my story done tetched yor heart. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
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My pleasure little lady 🙂
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I really liked his ‘typo-riddled, printed voice’. I’m guessing he could hardly get the words out in his grief. Good story as usual Rochelle. 🙂
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Spot on, JWD. Grief, fatigue, and tear-blurred vision. Thanks for your insightful comment.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Ahhh! Reminds me of the old shows. Seems it would make a good contemporary Spin and Marty.
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Spin and Marty meet on the internet and strike up a long distance friendship?
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Hahaha! Well, hey! Why not, huh?
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You got that much time?
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I really enjoyed this- very moving. But if you’re not careful, I’m going to suspect you of conducting an online romance of your own, Rochelle. If so, your bonus word could simply be “Aloha”. 😉
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Aw, what a sweet story!
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Thanks LW. Glad you liked it.
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Rochelle,
I just read David’s comments and I thought the captcha photo was the prompt too. Ha! Great heartfelt story. I like how you take it to a completely unexpected place!
Shalom,
Amy
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Thanks, Amy.
Alas the captcha picture missed the target anyway. Glad you liked my story.
shalom,
Rochelle
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this was so lovely! you made a moving story out of a very difficult photo prompt! you make it seem so easy..
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Thank you KZ. Sometimes they’re easy and sometimes they’re not. This one came from a deep place and, admittedly, came swiftly.
shalom,
Rochelle
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I agree with KZ.. it was a lovely, heart warming story ! loved it
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Thank you for your heart warming compliment, Shreyank.
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A really lovely story that encompasses not only the relationship between people and animals, but people and other people. Sad, but yet inspiring at the same time.
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Dear Sandra,
The tapestry of our lives never ceases to amaze me. People and creatures weave in and out leaving beautiful designs in our hearts. Often the threads are imported from unexpected places.
Thank you for your sweet comments.
shalom,
Rochelle
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A friend can see what others cannot.. This tale also speaks about the pain of losing something valuable. Touching!
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Dear Night,
Forging friendships and being a shoulder to cry on. Thanks for your compliments.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Well written. And thanks for hosting this prompt. I enjoyed participating.
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Thank you, Tony. And happy to have you aboard.
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Difficult 😦
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Indeed.
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Hi Rochelle, I like the back spacing over the typed words. It shows that after thought very well. Nice job.
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Thank you. I’m grateful for backspace. If I were using an old fashion typewriter I’d have to buy white out in the gallon size.
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I loved this sad tale Rochelle, a good indication of how real online friendships can be.
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Thank you Anne. Some of those online friendships are more tangible than face to face, aren’t they?
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Hi Rochelle,
Great story. Animal-human bonds are strong and lasting, and I liked the way you developed this story with a long distance connection. Ron
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Dear Ron,
Thank you for your insightful comment/compliments. Never discount any kind of close relationship.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I can’t remember if I commented earlier this morning. What a beautiful story. I feel like I should agree that saying “you’re there” for someone is sometimes all anyone has to say.
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Dear Atiya,
If I’ve learned one thing in life it’s that a friend just being there with no words at all is the best thing. Of course it’s more of a challenge with an online conversation when you can’t see the other person’s expression.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Hi Rochelle
Lovely story – and a fabulous photo – by the end I loved that horse too!
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Dear El,
I felt I knew him through Doug.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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After having read Doug’s post and learning that Mystic went to a happy home, the sting of loss is not so great–good story, Rochelle.
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Thank you, VB. Glad you liked the story.
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Everyone needs a friend like Amelia. What a loving heart. Even half way around the world she provided a shoulder. A very emotional and beautifully written piece.
this was a difficult prompt for me. It’s going to be interesting to what the horse lovers have to say about mine 🙂
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Dear Russell,
What can I say? Amelia has a great friend in Chase, too. 😉 Thank you for your lovely compliments.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Such a good story. I’m thankful to have a friend or two like Amelia. Why is it that the friends that let us silently fall apart are ultimately the ones that restore our souls?
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Dear Renee,
From personal experience, it’s never been the one who has all the answers that reaches me in my despair but, rather, the one who simply cries with me and proffers a hug.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Yes Rochelle, that is very true. Sometimes the best thing to say is nothing and just hold on.
Take care my dear.
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Glad you knew it was me. 😉 Silly iPad posted me as Anonymous on my own blog. Whassup with that????
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Silly iPad indeed. Have a wonderful day Rochelle. Can’t wait for the next photo prompt. I think I might have found a good one to contribute. Think I’ll snap the picture on my way home from work.
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Well done. I am not much for horses and I felt tugged.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/03/21/friday-fictioneers-march-22-2013-genre-humorous/
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Pleased to have tugged, Scott.
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Lovely tribute. I hope he’s well. Both of them.
Was able to post my link using my alternate machine. Whew! Now to read…..
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Thank you Erin, Your tribute was also touching.
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A touching story… conveys that sadness about losing a loved animal.
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Thanks, Dave.
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This was a touching story, Rochelle. So often we don’t know what to say and rather than say something ‘stupid’ we err on the side of caution. Two very powerful words, “I’m here”, are.
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Dear Michael,
Thank you for your insightful comment. In this situation less is definitely more.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Very realistically written “She typed and backspaced over at least a hundred shallow words of comfort before proffering only two.”
I love this story.
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Words I love to hear. Thank you, Abraham.
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Awwww. good, touching story.
and as an aside – i thought the captcha was the prompt also. i wrote a story for it and will post it later…. Randy
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You’re a class act, Randy. Glad you like my story. Love the Captcha story.:D
shalom,
Rochelle
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I’m so late to the game this week. And the only things coming to mind are single lines like “does that pony do any OTHER tricks” or something like “after such a long journey, thru a desert even, nothin to do but talk, and you still can’t tell me what his name is?” I will attempt coming back to read, should time permit.
Peace.
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She typed and backspaced over at least a hundred shallow words of comfort before proffering only two.
Couldn’t have put it better. Loved this story.
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I loved this line too…great story
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Thanks Emma and Daisy,
That’s one of my favorite lines, too. 😉 So true to internet life.
shalom,
Rochelle
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I know that feeling of separation of a beloved animal too well myself. Great story, with a deep depth of feeling.
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Thank you, Jackie. This one came from a deep place.
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Oh gosh – that was the bestest ever! It was all crafted so well that I was there at the computer screen – hurting with both of them. Kudos to a very talented writer!
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Dear Linda,
Thank you so much for such a glowing review. Doesn’t get much better than that.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Horses. They can really get to you. I can’t believe that some people actually don’t care about them or see their incredible grace and beauty.
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Beautiful animals indeed.
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Man, you broke my heart a bit. Moving.
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Sorry to have broken your heart…well not really. Thank you for the high compliment.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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your story and this photo prompt touches the heart. ♥
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Rochelle,
Last week you got me and this week as well. This is my favorite of yours…last week is now number 2. Now the whole story was well… excellent and spot on like you normally are but these two words (and the two words are not “I’m here”) are just brilliant.
I love when someone puts two words together, two simple words and they paint an instant image in your head.”I’m Here” was a nice touch but….”printed voice” …man that’s just poetry, that’s the perfect way to describe someone you communicate with through type chatting. I think that it’s brilliant…can I say it again…BRILLIANT!
Tom
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Dear Tom,
Your comments on “printed voice” fill me warm me. Glad you liked the story. It comes from a place deep in my heart and if it touches anyone else, it’s the exclamation point.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Sensitive and perceptive as always. And excellent “non-overly literal” use of the prompt as well. Thanks, Rochelle!
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Dear Perry,
I appreciate your comments. This piece is very close to my heart. Glad you liked it.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Rochelle… when I saw Doug’s photo, I thought… ‘Hmmm… what’s Rochelle going to do with this one… The Horse is HorseMeat! It’s a Drought and the Crops are Dead!’
Nicely layered piece.
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Why, Ted, whatever do you mean? Are you saying that my writing’s dark? Last week I wrote about Howdy Doody and he didn’t end up in a pile of splinters. 😉
Seriously glad you liked my story. Thank you .
Shalom
Rochelle
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Lovely study of friendship, both human and companion animal, there’s real depth here. Enjoyed reading it a lot.
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Thank you, Trudy. Glad you like it.
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So sad!
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What a touching story. Great read.
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Thank you, Shirley.
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I love that there are two (at least) relationships going on, and I enjoyed a couple reads to fully appreciate them. Nice story!
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Dear K,
Thank you for the warm comments to offset the cold snow this morning. You’re spot on in catching my intent with this story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Very nice. Particularly impressive is to create such a realistic, plangent scene within the 100 word limit. We are taken into it, observing and involved at the same time, but in only 100 words. This is an outstanding piece.
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Dear Pet,
Your comment leaves me warmed and somewhat stunned. One of the nicest compliments a writer can receive is to hear a reader felt involved in her story. Thank you so much.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Only 1 day, 7 hours and 6 minutes till the next Friday Fictioneer prompt 🙂
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Hello Rockstar – What can I say that hasn’t already been said. It’s just perfect. Particularly liked …she backspaced over a 100 shallow lines….etc.
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Dear Lora,
So happy to see you back among us. Your comments and friendship mean a lot to me.
Happy you liked my story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
I loved the line …backspaced over at least a hundred shallow words of comfort… so true to life, how often do we search for the right words of compassion in a situation like this and often fail miserably.
Great relationships going on in this story, loved it
Dee
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Dear Dee,
That does seem to be just about everyone’s favorite line this week. Perhaps because being an online community we can all relate well to the backspace key 😉 Glad you dropped by to comment.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I related to the backspace key bit too. Trying to teach myself to use it more often. And wish I could backspace over my mouth.
You have a huge gift for conveying feeling in few and apt words, like in this good application of personification:
‘Amelia’s screen blurred.’
“No big deal.” Don’t know what this device is called, but it’s obvious your character’s writing the opposite of what’s going on. And it also serves to characterise Jayne, maybe, as a not quite nice character.
Thanks for the good read.
Ann
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Dear Ann,
I know what you mean about backspacing over your mouth. That comment has me rolling.
Chase is in denial, when he says “No big deal.” He makes light of it to keep Amelia from knowing how badly he’s hurting.
Anyway, I’m so glad you liked it and thank you for dropping by with your comments.
shalom,
Rochelle
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I like this: “Rochelle made her entrance into the world the same year her parents purchased their first car.”
For the record, I made my entrance into the world six months after my parents married.
Where’s the backspace key?
🙂
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Was at a conference last week and didn’t get in on this one, but wrote for it nonetheless to keep the series going! http://starvingactivist.wordpress.com/2013/03/28/friday-fictioneers-22-march-2013-one-mite-pt-5/
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