10 June 2016

Published June 8, 2016 by rochellewisoff

Summer Showcase

Summer is the time for vacations, picnics on the beach and reruns on the telly. For me it’s a time to meet a deadline in July for my third novel in my series entitled AS ONE MUST ONE CAN. Many thanks to those of you who responded to my plea for your favorite reruns. 

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Originally posted here.

Genre: Realistic Fiction

Word Count: 99


            When other kids give Mrs. Loftis flowers she’s all giggly. But when I bring them she gets frowny.

            Why don’t she like me? I read better’n anybody else in first grade and I color in between the lines.  Mommy says it’s my ‘magination.

            Tonight sirens and mad grown-up voices wake me up. I run to Mommy’s room. She’s crying. So’s her boyfriend.

            There’s a gun on the floor and a policeman is putting handcuffs on…Mrs. Loftis? Her face is all twisty and red.

            “You cheap husband stealing tramp!” she shouts.

            Guess it’s not me she don’t like after all.        

89 comments on “10 June 2016

  • How difficult it has to be for a child to think they are to blame… how tragic, and maybe I should say I’m happy for the resolution though… it seems there was no real bloodshed. The voice of the child (and the story) reminds me of “the curious incident of the dog in the nighttime”.

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    • Dear Dale,

      Glad you liked the title. 😉 This story is based on the experience of a friend of mine. In her case it was her scout leader. Fortunately, her story never played out like this but she did find out that she wasn’t the reason her scout leader didn’t like her.

      Thank you.



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  • Great story, Rochelle. I taught Grade 1. How terribly difficult it would be to explain a situation like that to a child. At least there was no bloodshed. Realistic dialog for the child narrator. Well written as always. —- Suzanne

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  • Hello, Rochelle!
    I loved this story. It’s very different from your more frequent flashes; I quite enjoyed reading it and appreciate your versatility. The MC has a great voice and made me giggle at the end. Great take!
    Cheers, Sara

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  • I remember this story. A good story of perspective in thinking we have done something to make people not like us. We should all think hard about that. It’s not always our fault. Right? Of course right. Also……never try to put Rochelle in a particular “box”. Lol. It doesn’t work.


  • Dear Nadia,
    The child’s problem is obvious and revealed in the second paragraph wherein she states, “I color in between the lines.” She’ll never make it through cake decorating college until she gets beyond that, regardless of who her mother is sleeping with.

    Case solved,
    Bubba Snakeshit

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    • Dear Kevin,

      An innocent child is easily the target in so many cases I think. This one’s based on a true story although it didn’t have quite the dramatic ending. 😉
      Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment. Much appreciated.



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  • Still a great story after two years! It hasn’t gone off or anything.
    Poor kid, She seems to understand the situation, though. I guess they’ll have a substitute teacher tomorrow, so that’ll be fun.

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    • Dear Ali,

      I’m sure the substitute teacher will be a better fit for this kid. Thank you such a nice comment. I’m enjoying the respite as I’m averaging 500 to 1000 words a day in the novel. And when I’m not at the keyboard I’m spinning story in my head.



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  • Dear Rochelle

    Brilliant storytelling as ever — as others have already said, especially the child’s voice.

    Presently, I’m watching a TV series set in Northern Ireland in which a married man is having an affair with a married teacher. It’s going from bad to worse this story, with both the wronged innocent parties murdered. I dread what’s going to happen to the children.

    Have you any idea if Douglas M. MacIlroy is going to reappear in Blogland anytime soon? I was going to link my copyright acknowledgement of his prompt photo to his blog, but he hasn’t posted since last September.

    Hope you’re having a wonderful productive week.

    All best wishes

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    • Dear Sarah,

      It’s sad when there are children involved in sordid affairs. That TV series sounds kind of awful.

      I’m averaging between 500 to 1000 words a day on the novel and when I’m not typing I’m spinning story in my head.;)

      Your question I’ve answered in a private email.

      Thank you.



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      • Dear Rochelle
        Being a true story, it’s particularly awful. The woman spends 20 years haunted by her actions and feeling the most terrible guilt, even though she has tried to put the whole thing behind her, caring for her children and being a loving wife to her second husband (not the murderer).
        You sound as if you’re being very disciplined with your novel. I love it when one is working on a first draft and spinning the story most of every day, whether at the computer or not.
        Thanks for your email.
        All best wishes


    • Dear Freya,

      Every so often I step away from the expected. It is exhilarating. 😉 Of course this one is a couple of years old. For the next couple of months I’ve let other people choose their old favorite prompts. So like television it’s summer reruns.
      Friday Fictioneers is a labor of love for me for a number of reasons. However, presently, I’m in the throes of meeting a deadline for my third novel. So the reruns are a way to clear my head for novel writing. I hope that made some kind of sense.

      At any rate, thank you for your kind words.



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