30 September 2016

Published September 28, 2016 by rochellewisoff

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It’s not exactly an excerpt but a snippet tweaked to be a teaser to my book From Silt and Ashes. 

Genre: Historical Fiction

Word Count: 100

PRELUDE TO AN ODYSSEY

          After weeks of contemplation and numerous entreaties from Dr. Trubachov in Ukraine, Dr. Nikolai Derevenko tendered his resignation to St. Thomas Hospital. As he left the administrator’s office he felt one of his burdens had lifted.

         “Good morning, Doctor.”

         An attractive nurse whose dimensions stretched her starched uniform to its limits cocked her head and flashed a dimpled smile. He followed her with his eyes to the other end of the corridor until she turned and entered a patient’s room.

        When he returned to his original path he looked up in time to avoid a collision with a police officer.

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97 comments on “30 September 2016

  • Hahaha! I love the stretched uniform description. Nikolai will definitely need to watch where he’s going. Nice excerpt. You sure you didn’t get this from one of my experiences at OHO? In Nikolai’s case she DID speak English. 😉

    Five out of five 36’s — and 24’s and 36’s. 😀

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  • Intrigued to know what’s ahead for the good doctor. A trip to Ukraine (presumably without shapely nurse in tow!) but it sounds as if it won’t be smooth sailing for the poor man. Lovely descriptions and a great hint at your novel, Rochelle

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  • All these teasing bits have hooked me. I just need to get my device to read it to me and we’re all set. (I have to have it read to me because I can’t read books at the office and I work from home at night. Business never sleeps even if I have to on occasion just to rest the eyes.)

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    • Dear Ellen,

      Personally I don’t picture the nurse as a floozy. At the same time Nikolai isn’t a bad looking man either. As for the policeman, his reaction is, “Don’t blame you a bit. A man would have to be in his grave two years not to notice that one.”
      Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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    • Dear Liz,
      Actually, I’ll confess that the nurse is merely a sidetrack. And I’m going to correct my spelling posthaste. As far as I know it’s the same on both sides of the pond. Thank you for catching it. 😉

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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  • Dear Ruth,

    I’ve never been a doctor, but I’ve always wanted to play one on TV. Nothing too challenging like a neurologist or a cardiologist, but I don’t want to be a proctologist either (even though I’ve been close to a few a**holes).

    And whatever happened to those starched white nurses uniforms with the cute little hats? When those women gave you an examination, you knew you’d been touched by a professional, not just some greenhorn wearing pajamas.

    Maybe that’s what Trump means when he talks about Making America Great again.

    Yours truly,
    Sid Bashem

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    • Dear Sid,

      I’m not sure how to respond to this. I do miss the cute little nurse’s uniforms with the caps. At one time I fancied the idea of being a candy striper and meeting Dr. Kildare. Who knew he preferred boys? Sigh. When I realized that working in a hospital meant blood and poop the deal was off and I got a job at Dairy Queen instead.

      Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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  • No one I know, certainly no gentleman, professional of stature, doctor, or otherwise, would ever let their vision linger that long on a sensual female object to the point that they’d run into a cop…. naw, no way, no one, not ever, nada, just not possible.
    (Ahem.)
    Randy

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  • Like everyone, I loved the description of the nurse. I am torn whether she was voluptuous or just an extremely large woman. Great job at leaving us wanting more.

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    • Dear Cindy,

      I’m pleased with the reactions to the nurse. It proves that one doesn’t have to write porn to get the message across. 😉 Go with voluptuous. That’s how I see her. Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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    • Dear Gabriele,

      I’m still awaiting the proof copy so I can go over it with a finetooth comb, or as my art teacher in junior high used to say, spend some time ‘loving’ it. Your comments make me smile. Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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  • Well, now you have me wondering. Who is the policeman for? Or maybe he’s for both of them. Wonderful writing, as always.There’s also so much packed into your descriptions and still you are able to keep the flow of your story going. That’s quite masterful! Oh, and thanks so much for choosing my photo. I was surprised. I think this one was my favorite angle. 🙂

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    • Dear Amy,

      Thank you for sharing your photo. I found it intriguing. As for the policeman, he might not be there for either of them. 😉 You’ll find out when you read From Silt and Ashes. Thank you for such a wonderful comment and Happy Birthday!

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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      • Thanks so much, Rochelle. And I absolutely adored your EPIC birthday for me. Oh, I was so touched!

        You want to hear something funny…the day after I read your story, I read this part in your book. 🙂 So, now you know where I am. Sorry, it’s taken me so long to start. I just started a new job a couple of months ago and I feel spread pretty thin. Want to do more reading and writing! I’m so very proud of you and your accomplishments. I’m really loving your book!

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    • Dear StepHonie,

      I couldn’t as for a better comment/compliment. I’ve done a few of these teasers. If it sells books, who am I to complain? I hope you’re hooked enough to read the books. Wink wink.
      Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It means a lot.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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