20 January 2023

Published January 18, 2023 by rochellewisoff

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Genre: Fiction/Novel Excerpt
Word Count: 100

I’m not sure you can call this a whole story, rather it is a snippet from my upcoming novel LAST DANCE WITH ANNIE. I’ve been so busy with edits that I just didn’t have the headspace for something new. Maybe next week.

SPIN CYCLE

After her parents died, within three years of each other, victims of their own bad habits—smoking and overeating—Elise ramped up her exercise routines. She took pride in achieving sixteen percent body fat.

Tony, obsessed with his personal workout program, never seemed to notice his wife had a problem. In fact, he praised her new slender form and stamina.

             Elise’s flashbacks of childhood abuse surfaced in her mid-thirties. Each memory took her appetite, exacerbating her hatred for her body. When she sought help from a professional, Tony fumed and said she had no right to air their dirty laundry.

73 comments on “20 January 2023

  • No one really knows what goes on inside someone’s skin except the person wearing it. Perhaps Tony was fighting his own demons. It is so easy for people to judge but so hard to sometimes forgive. Your teaser will undoubtably end up as a great novel. As are your previous ones.

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  • So hard to judge the characters from a snippet (maybe that’s a lesson for life, eh?), but I feel I would find Elsie as hard to live with as Tony – and hopefully both have a chance at redemption in the novel-length version.

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    • Dear Jen,

      I think you’re spot on about Elise. Both of them have their issues. Things will definitely be explained and worked through in the novel version. Meanwhile it’s interesting to read the different perceptions. 😉 Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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  • Tony needs help as much as she does, even if only to be educated on eating disorders. If Tony can’t with the program, maybe it is time they part ways. Good story about a real situation with victims who want to recover but can’t get loved ones to give appropriate support.

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  • Trauma, especially in our formative years, is a hard thing to overcome. Even subtle things we don’t realize are traumatic can profoundly affect us. We are far more fragile than we care to accept or admit.

    I hope your edits go well. I’m also immersed in the rabbit hole of editing and rewriting my adult novel. I realized I had lost a character in the middle of a chapter. Where’d she go? I don’t know. The rabbit hole? It took less time to write the damn thing.

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    • Dear Lish,

      The fashion industry has done a lot to make women feel ashamed of their bodies. Twiggy made my life a nightmare. I know she didn’t mean to. 😉 What we don’t realize is that if Barbie was a living being, with her measurements she’d be a French poodle. 😉
      Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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  • Naturally I HAD To participate, given that Pinkish was starring as the photo prompt!
    🙂
    Love the excerpt, and you know I think the books is fab!
    And … may bodies be allowed to be what they are, and may health and beauty not be tied into the fallacies of size and pseudo perfection. Amen.
    xoxo
    Na’ama

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    • Na’ama Y’karah,

      I have my ways of luring peeps back to the FFFold. 😉

      As for the book, it’s going through multiple changes. But Elise’s story remains in tact. So far the editors’ (plural) suggestions have been good ones. Still it’s leaving me cross-eyed.

      As we were told in one of our support groups, if Barbie were a living, breathing being, with her proportions, she’d be a French poodle. 😉 Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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  • Dear Rochelle,

    A hard-hitting glimpse in to your character’s life–her struggles and her husband not seeming to notice that anything is amiss.

    It’s great when women and others speak out against body shaming and to see more modeling agencies have curve and plus size models. Sometimes, we are our own worse critics when it comes to our bodies.

    Shalom,
    Adele

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    • Dear Adele,

      Here it is Wednesday morning and I’m still catching up.

      Confession, this story is based on my own. The names and some things have been changed to protect the innocent.

      The modeling industry is among the worst offenders. Thank you.

      Shalom,

      Rochelle

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