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Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
This is actually an excerpt from my first novel PLEASE SAY KADDISH FOR ME. I removed the names and didn’t have enough words to give you the setting anyway. The book itself is historical fiction but this scene could take place anywhere I think. (If you want to more, the book’s available on Amazon or from the author. 😉 )
GODSPEED
Like a brother, he gave her forehead a discreet kiss. “Farewell, my sweet friend. You’ve written a melody on my heart that will play on forever.”
Suddenly his forced smile dissolved. He engulfed her in a strong embrace and mashed his lips against hers. Then he dropped his arms and stepped back.
Lips tingling and unsure of what to do or say next, she studied his face. She wanted to remember every detail, every line. Taking a step toward him she rose on tiptoe, brushed her lips over his cheek and whispered, “I will miss the music in your eyes.”
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I hope you’ll check out all four books of the Trilogy.
Rochelle Wisoff-Fields-Addicted to Purple 
Very quick off the mark today! Usually the photo appears slightly later. What a beautiful farewell, I wonder if they’ll see each other again? Great stuff!
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Dear Shrawley,
Of course I don’t want to give it away, but they will see each other again…in my second book. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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glad they see each other again
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Dear Rochelle,
I adore this. Such a beautiful piece. You are absolutely correct. This could definitely be anywhere with any two people… though I do have a fondness for both characters 😉
Lotsa love,
Dale
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Dear Dale,
I admit they are two of my favorites. I wonder where the novels would’ve gone had she married him. Nah…wasn’t meant to be. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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You know how I felt about the two of them… sigh… All’s well that ends well 😉
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Universal I think, Rochelle. It stands for all our goodbyes
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Dear Neil,
Goodbyes are particularly difficult when we will probably never see the person we care about again.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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This is a beautiful scene, Rochelle. Good writing as always. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you, Suzanne. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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This is lovely Rochelle. Love the idea of music in your eyes.
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Dear Di,
I wish I could say the line was completely original. I heard it an obscure folk song and had to ‘have it.’ It just fit the character to a T. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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🙂 You’re welcome Rochelle.
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This is beautiful writing, Rochelle. Really beautiful.
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Dear Varad,
You’ve left me smiling. Thank you. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Beautifully done. And the ‘music in your eyes’ is such a compelling image.
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Dear Sandra,
Your lovely comment is music to my eyes. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Exquisite little scene.
Sounds like we are heading for a crescendo of violins.
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Dear CE,
I’m always up for a crescendo of violins. 😀 Thank you for such a lovely comment/compliment.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I love the scene… and though I’ve read the book I think it stands almost better on its own… it opens up all the possibilities of forbidden love… the music as a metaphor is wonderful
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Dear Björn,
Time to read the second book, no? 😉 I thought it would be fun this week to rewrite the scene without names or background to let the reader draw his or her own conclusions. 😀 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Steeped in poignance and loss, Rochelle. Well done.
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Thank you, Josh.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I loved that line, I will miss the music is your eyes.
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Thank you, Michael.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Gorgeous last line, Rochelle!
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you so much, Susan. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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You’ve left a lot of details out. Is it a very sad separation, or the hard part of good news, or what?
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Dear Larry,
With only 100 words I left the backstory up to the reader. Good news? You decide.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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The last line is a wonderful epitaph. Lovely tender vignette.
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Thank you, Iain. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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The music never dies.
The memory of the eyes
Will play till the demise…
Have a great week!
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Dear Anita,
A comment so nice
Will more than suffice
At even half the price.
😉
Thank you and shalom,
Rochelle
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Very tender scene.
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Thank you, Trent.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Such a beautiful piece, Rochelle.
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Thank you so much, Loré. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Oh, Rochelle, that’s lovely. A beautiful scene painted in beautiful language. Shalom.
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Thank you, Penny. You’ve given my morning a smile. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Truly, a very beautiful piece. Yes, it is universal__could happen to anyone, anywhere. As usual, your writing stands out, Rochelle.
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Many thanks for such a wonderful comment and compliment, Neel. ❤ 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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What a lovely little scene, that indeed can be anyplace, almost anywhere. So sweet and loving and so full of mystery, too. What’s next, I wonder. Where is he going? Will they meet again? Why are they separating?
Well done!
Here’s my piece (which I’d left with the link-a-think-thing, too, of course):
https://naamayehuda.com/2018/10/31/she-checks-mate/
Na’ama
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Na’ama Y’karah,
All is revealed in my novel Please Say Kaddish for Me. 😉 At any rate I tweaked this scene so it can stand by itself and allow the reader to imagine his or her own ending. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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yeah … it’s going on my ‘to-read’ list! 🙂
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I wept the first time I read this… I weep again today as I read this. Going to have to sit with this pic for a little while…It’s too scary, the images it brings to mind, that is. Not sure I can put words to it….
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Dear Bear,
Your tears are the highest praise this piece could receive. I actually shed a few tears myself when I wrote it. ❤ Thank you, my friend.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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A perfect scene for this picture. Your words project love and warmth, but the actions….
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Dear Lish,
My husband couldn’t figure out how I found my story in the prompt. 😉 Thank you for your kind words.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Very tender moment. Glad he risked pushing beyond his “friend” status in this moment of parting.
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Dear Andrea,
He did push his limits a tad. 😉 In this case, I left it up to the reader to decide how things will play out. The scene in my first novel is another story. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Well, the eyes are the window to the soul. So what you see MAY be what you are hoping for. Or not. Beautifully tender.
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Dear Jan,
It is about what you see, isn’t it? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9qM5LVkwVyw
Thanks, m’luv ❤
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Saying goodbye with no expectation of meeting again… raw emotions.
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Many thanks, Jo. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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No one should ever have to say goodbye with no hope of meeting again. That’s just wrong. This is so well written, Rochelle. You’ve made me want the whole story.
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Dear Linda,
You know…;) This is a snippet from Please Say Kaddish for Me. At this point these two don’t know if they ever will see each other again. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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What an absolutely beautiful story, Rochelle. I loved every word, feeling, emotion, etc. And the last line topped it all.
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Dear Adele,
I’m so pleased you enjoyed my story and left such an affirming comment. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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You’re welcome, Rochelle 🙂 Shalom.
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Sweet.
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Thank you, Linda.
Shalom
Rochelle
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Awww, that was so beautiful Rochelle. Shalom.
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Thank you so much, Anurag.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Beautiful romantic story.
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Thank you, Abhijit. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Quite sad that it appears he’s finally showing his true feelings just as they part.
I love the caption on your final picture – “… all **four** books of the Trilogy” 🙂
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Dear Ali,
Indeed this might be the first time he aggressively shows his true feelings. Glad you caught my ‘four books of the Trilogy.’ 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
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A beautifully written piece which leaves us wondering if it was a final farewell.
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Dear Keith,
You’ll have to read the novel to find out. 😉 At the the time she believes it’s a final farewell. BTW, love your new picture. A very distinguished looking gentleman, I’d say.
Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I really think I should! A distinguished gentleman? If only you knew! Cheers.
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I love mushy stories. Enjoyed it. It has a nice ring to it.
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Dear Priya,
I love a good helping of mush and romance myself. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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At least they got that one kiss before they parted.
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Very true, Liz. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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it must be springtime in the valley. i see love blossoming before my eyes. 🙂
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Love is definitely in the air, Plaridel. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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So sad, so romantic. The ones we lose…Just lovely.
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Dear Miranda,
Some choices had to be made is all I will say. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Beautiful story, Rochelle. It has great dramatic undertones. I hope you’re having a good week. 🙂
-David
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Dear David,
A good week indeed. It has been a good one to recover from the previous one. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I’m glad to hear that.
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Nice romance, Rochelle. Glad you mentioned it will continue later on.
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Thank you very much, Stu. Who doesn’t love a good romance from time to time? 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Oh this was such a fabulous scene. I really loved this first book. (I have the second on my giant to read pile!) Sad, loving, longing. A great scene
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Dear Laurie,
I’m so glad you loved the book. Havah and I both thank you. 😉 I know about piles of books to read.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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A loving and affecting scene between two people that, as others have said, could be anytime anywhere. I hope they will meet again, Rochelle.
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Dear Jilly,
Lovers and friends part company, don’t they? Sometimes they reconnect and sometimes they don’t. 😉 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Querida Rochelle,
Un cuento muy amoroso. Me gusto muchas.
Es un tema differente para usted. El mysterio de quienes son y si
se ven ortra vez esta muy bueno.
Feliz fin de semana, mi amiga
Abrazos y carino … Shalom
Isadora 😎
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Querida Isadora,
Esto cuento es de my libro Please Say Kaddish from Me. 😉 Gracias para sus palabras amables, mi amiga. Feliz Lunes.
Abrazos y shalom,
Rochelle
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Querida Rochelle,
Que pena que la mente no se recuerda de cosas. Haci me esta pasando. Le digo de verdad que haci estoy en estos días. Perdona … quizás tengo muchos anos y me creo joven o tengo tristesa que no me deja ver lo que necesito ver. Si … fleiz nueva semana … Abrazos y Cariño
Isadora 😎
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I felt so sad for both of them and you did that in so few words. Beautifully written farewell scene. I too hope they meet again.
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Dear Brenda,
To tell the truth, I cried when I wrote this scene in my first novel. It is entirely probably they will meet again…in another book. 😉 Thank you for your kind and encouraging words.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Your tears were felt through the writing of the scene.
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Beautifully captured. Nicely written.
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Many thanks, Jaya. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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now I am curious about the characters back story, but in the meantime they left some of that music with the reader – could feel the parting angst
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Dear Yvette,
You went exactly where I wanted to you. 😀 These characters (who are real people to me) have plenty of backstory in my trilogy of novels. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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oh right on (and write on)
🙂
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Simply beautiful & the characters are great.
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Thank you so much, Lisa.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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What a bittersweet scene! Love the contrast between the discreet kiss on her forehead and the passionate one that followed.
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Dear Magarisa,
There’s something very special about a reader getting what the writer wants to say. 😀 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Always a pleasure.
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Beautifully written farewell scene, it’s captured the emotions so well. “music in your eyes” is a lovely way to put it.
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Dear Subroto,
Thank you so much for your affirming comments. It’s a favorite scene of mine in my first novel.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Beautiful piece Rochelle, capturing in words what many can only feel
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Dear Michael,
As Shakespeare said, “Parting is such sweet sorrow.” 😀 Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I will miss the music in your eyes…oh my…how lovely!
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Thank you, Dawn. 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Nikolai’s story brought a tear to my eyes, I could almost hear his flute. I’m so sorry for the hurt this person caused you. I’m not trained so I don’t know the proper way of commenting, but everything I’ve read of yours is beautifully told and saturated with depth and feeling. I always find it easy to bond with your characters. Unfortunately, I think there are people out there who put others down to make themselves feel better, no matter what arena.
I was motivated and encouraged by reading your comments and so glad to hear you’ll not quit! I hope you are able to shake off the negative, hurtful feelings this person passed on. They are not worth the energy of self-doubt (though I understand the strength of self-doubt in my own life). I also hope you have a joyful week ahead!
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Dear Brenda,
I’m glad you enjoyed Nikolai’s story. Of all the characters in my trilogy, he’s by far the most complex.
I don’t know that there’s a right or wrong way to comment. Aside from the negative reviewer, of course. 😉 Hers was simply hurtful and hateful, if not ridiculously long.
Not quitting here. Too many words to write. So little time. Thank you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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